中文原文
早上出门的时候下雨了，我带了雨伞。等到下班雨已经停了，但是风很大。我把雨伞收起来走路回家，路上看到路边的树枝被风吹断了。
My translation
It was raining when I stepped out of the door this morning, so I brought my umbrella. By the time I was off work, the rain had stopped, but it was still windy outside. I folded my umbrella up and walked toward home. I saw branches by the road was cut down by the wind.
Revised version
It was raining when I stepped out the door this morning, so I took my umbrella with me. By the time I got off work, the rain had stopped, but it was still windy outside. I folded up my umbrella and headed home. I saw some roadside branches had been blown down by the wind.
Key phrases
- step out the door, no ‘of’
- got off work instead of be off work
- fold up sth.
- roadside branches，路边的树枝
- blown down，风吹断