中文原文
今天下班路上，我路过一家面包店。橱窗里的面包闻起来很香，于是进去挑了几个。回家之后，我尝了一个，味道很不错，打算之后有空再来买。
My translation
Today, I was off work, on the way back home, I came across a bakery store. The bread in the shelf smelled tasty, so I went in and picked a few. After I got home, I tasted one, which was pretty good. So I planned to buy again later.
Revised version
I finished work today. On my way home, I passed a bakery. The bread on the shelf smelled amazing, so I went in and picked out a few. Once I got home, I tried one. It was really good. I plan to come back for more sometime.
Key phrases
- finish work 下班（比 be off work 更常用，be off work 多指休息日）
- pick out 挑选
- come back for more 再来买一些，很地道，不用生硬的 buy again