中文原文
下午你在图书馆看书，看得太投入忘记时间。等你合上书，才发现图书馆快要闭馆。收拾好随身物品出门，才发现外面刮起大风，你赶紧快步走向地铁站。
My translation
I was reading books at the library this afternoon. I was so focused that I forgot the time. Not until I closed the book, I realized the library was going to be closed. I packed up my belongings and stepped outside, then I found it was windy, so I headed fast to the subway station.
Revised version
I was reading at the library this afternoon. I got so absorbed that I lost track of time. Not until I closed my book did I realize the library was about to close. I gathered my things and stepped outside, only to find it was windy. I hurried toward the subway station.
Key phrases
- got so absorbed：看得十分投入，比 so focused 更贴合看书场景
- lost track of time：忘记时间，日常高频地道短语，替代 forgot the time
- only to find…：结果却发现……，用来引出意外情况，叙事感很强
- hurried toward：快步赶往